Reflective Draft (Blog #5)

Mid-Semester Reflective Cover Letter

During the course of this semester so far we have discussed the basic learning process of writing a successful paper. We are six weeks into my first semester of college and I can say that my writing skill has improved very much. Even though they are not perfect and are full of areas of improvement, this has definitely been a huge stepping stone for me and my writing. I spent many days working on my papers from emailing them to my dad, revising them over with peers, and just simple revision over and over again. By the end of the end of the semester I hope to go into the next level of college English a good understanding of forming a precision paper. Throughout my reflection I’m going to discuss my strengths and weakness’.
I entered English 101 with no clue on how the class was going to be. I surely came in with the perspective of “I got this in the bag.” After leaving high school and a high school were teaching was an effort for our teachers. My teachers were very careless and my English skills were according to them, excellent. I believe that one of my strengths that I developed on my own was forming good points in each of my paragraphs. I was able to take a piece of work and read it, analyze it, and break it down. The lacking concept that I had was the ability to take my ideas and form it into a comprehendible paragraph. My sentence structure was weak. With run-on sentences and pathetic grammar, my paragraphs were hard to understand to my professor. But as I’m writing this reflective paper I am being very careful on structuring. In the two papers I wrote for Professor Fornes there were mistakes of clarity and punctuation on both papers. Fornes wrote notes and ideas for improvement such as “you have great ideas”, “hard to understand what is being said.”

Paper revision (Blog #4)

Paper 1"Foreign Athletic Limits"
Grade: C -Explanation: The grammar is poor throughout the paper. Run on sentences and lack of clarity. Seems to be very bias toward foreign athletes and how they are receiving the scholarships.

Paper 2
"Online College vs Online High School"
Grade: D
Explanation: There is a mistake in the first paragraph which distracts immediately. Commas are not used properly. Spelling and punctuation are weak. Conclusion is not strong.

Paper 3:
"Predisposed Divorce"
Grade: B-
Explanation: Too many question proposed to the reader. Again run-on sentences and weak punctuation. Citations were poor. But overall paper was well written
Paper 4:
"NAACP Case Against Gun Manufactures"
Grade: BExplanation: Spelling and grammar are poor. A lot of minor mistakes. Anyway needs to be changed to any way. Minor spelling errors. Just a lack of attention.

Blog Post #3

In the article written by Hagelin, she goes into detail with specific events that relate to the video gaming world and how it effects our younger generation. Being a gamer myself, even though supported with actual events, it does not mean that video games are the root of our criminal world. Hagelin does state that "I am not saying that every kid who plays a violent video game will become a criminal." Even with this being said, Hagelin is very bias towards the gaming world. Even though the population of these games are teenage boys and young men, and the mind is still developing, being a teenager they are instilled in them the rights from wrongs. Blaming the violent games for criminal actions is unnecessary. People learn best from experience, and it seems that Hagelin hasn't had much experience behind the controller of a "form" of entertainment.

Video Games Violence and Our Sons (blog #2)

Between the two articles that I read, I chose "Video Game Violence and Our Sons" by Rebecca Hagelin. The reason for me choosing this article, is because I disagree with Hagelin, she argues the point that video games influence violence, even though she says something like not all gamers are not going to become criminals. Being a video gamer myself, it never had a negative violent influence on what I did, I always new that it was just a game. Video games do not have negative influence the young, it is all what the person takes it to be. It is not mind warping system, its just a Hobie, a time killer, a social thing, and that's my argument against Hagelin.